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Part Four: Ponies Don't Fear The Reaper

Twilight sat at the bottom of that dark pit cradling Dewdrop's body for what seemed like an eternity, though it couldn't have been longer than a few seconds. She shook constantly, sobbing into Dewdrop's matted, dusty hair.

"You stupid, silly pony" she whispered hoarsely to Dewdrop as she held her in her hooves, though she wasn't sure if she'd aimed that at Dewdrop or herself. Her head was awash with angry, guilty thoughts, her stomach was a boiling maelstrom and she wanted to be sick.

"There's no such thing as 'evil'" Princess Luna had once told her. "No pony gets up one morning and decides that they're going to go out and do bad things. They do bad things thinking that they're the most reasonable and logical reactions to a situation." Was it true? Had Twilight really gone too far? Was it more than just a terrible accident?

Not even Princess Luna in her darkest of hours had ever killed another pony. It was unheard of. Inconceivable. And yet there she was, Princess Celestia's star pupil, the best and brightest of Equestria, holding the body of a pony whose death she had caused.

The only sound in that cold, lonely hole was Twilight's ragged sobbing.

No pony had seen her; no pony knew she had sent Dewdrop to her death. Twilight could always leave her for somepony else to find. She rolled the thought around in her mind, knowing that there was an alternative. That she could escape this situation, run and hide in her own guilt.

"No!" She straightened up, her face set in determination as she laid Dewdrop onto the cold ground. The little pony looked so small and pathetic sprawled out on the ground, her eyes closed, body getting colder by the second. "No!" Twilight shouted again. "This isn't how it's supposed to be! I won't let it!"

She leaned over Dewdrop, pressing her hooves against the pony's chest, and pushed hard. Again. "Come on Dewdrop! Don't you dare do this to me!" she hissed as she put all her weight on the pony's ribcage, rhythmically compressing it. Her knowledge of Equestrian first aid was fuzzy at best; she remembered vaguely that a pony could last for up to three and a half minutes without a flow of oxygen. There was still time. There had to be.

Dewdrop hadn't moved. She was still cold and unbreathing. Twilight used her hooves to clamp shut Dewdrop's nose and hesitantly pressed her lips against Dewdrop's, breathing in one full breath, before starting compressions again. "Come on! Come on!" she wailed, her face a mixture of despair and resolve. She knew there were medical unicorns in Canterlot who could use magic to restart a pony's heart, but she'd never even thought of taking her studies in that direction.

She'd never even passed her basic first aid training.

The theory was simple enough, but in practise you were supposed to push down hard on the chest – really hard, and Twilight was uncomfortable enough doing that on the dummies provided, let alone the kiss of life. But there was no-one else, and no matter what she'd done, Dewdrop didn't deserve this.

"Hi Twilight, have you – oh, awkward!" Spike's head had popped over the edge of the hole and retreated almost as quickly as soon as he'd seen Twilight giving Dewdrop mouth to mouth.

"Spike!" Twilight's head jerked up, her eyes red, her cheeks stained from tears. "Spike, I-I think she's dead. Get help!"

Spike froze and scampered off. Twilight was alone again.

She crumpled next to Dewdrop, defeated. It was no good, Dewdrop was still lying there lifeless, and it was all her fault. In despair, she pressed her hooves together and, looking up, prayed to the heavens.

"Oh Princess Celestia!" she wailed, "I didn't mean for this to happen, please believe me! Please let Dewdrop be okay! I promise to be good to her; I won't get annoyed at her ever again, she can stay as long as she likes, forever!" Twilight sighed and broke off. It was useless. Silence reigned in the pit.

Suddenly there was a sharp intake of air and Twilight leapt back, terrified out of her wits. Dewdrop Dazzle sat bolt upright, her hair frazzled in all directions, staring wildly ahead. "WAS SOMEPONY KISSING ME?" she blurted out.

Twilight coughed and stared up at the sky. "Uh... backsies?" she offered.


Twilight Sparkle was a hero.

She wasn't a hero of course. All the other ponies were treating her like one, as she hauled Dewdrop out of the hole having saved her life. They didn't know she'd been the one to put it in danger in the first place, and Dewdrop hadn't said a word. She had fallen into a deep sleep as soon as the rescue team arrived.

Apparently Pinkie Pie was holding a celebratory party but Twilight had declined to attend. She'd made excuses about needing to make sure Dewdrop was all right, and that was true, but mostly she couldn't face being congratulated for having nearly killed the one pony who trusted and idolised her above all else.

Twilight sat next to Dewdrop, who was now sleeping soundly in her bed. Twilight had found a crudely sewn little cuddly toy of Twilight which she'd placed in Dewdrop's hooves as she slept. Normally such a discovery would have crept Twilight out, but right now she was just glad that the little pony was still alive. Nurse Mercy had been round to check on her but she still hadn't woken from her slumber. The house was very quiet. Twilight had a lot of time to think about things.


Dewdrop's eyes were open, and she weakly stared up at Twilight from the bed. "I did it!" she whispered. "I didn't want you to be in danger so I went out and I found that idol and destroyed it, but then I fell into this deep hole!" Her eyes misted over slightly and she choked. "A-and I'm sorry. I was hanging there for ages and I think I started seeing things because I thought you were there pushing me in, but that couldn't be true because you're the nicest, most wonderful pony ever, and I feel awful for thinking that about you even for a second!"

Dewdrop looked up at Twilight wide-eyed, and Twilight gave a nervous gulp. "Dewdrop, listen" she softly replied.

Dewdrop pressed her head into the warmth of the pillow and continued, now staring up at the ceiling. "It was awful in Canterlot, you know" she spoke out, and Twilight wasn't sure if she was talking to her, or just to herself. "They say it's the place of opportunities, but that isn't always true. I worked copying manuscripts in one of the palace outbuildings. There were hundreds of us, at desks all day every day, just writing down word after word. Then I'd go home and I'd eat and sleep, and then I'd go to work again, then eat and sleep. The same thing, day after day, a grey life in a grey building."

Dewdrop let her head flop back towards Twilight, and she could see tears in her eyes. "And one day I read about you. About your life and your friends and your magical adventures. You showed me a different way of living, a better way, and I never said thank you."

Twilight just sat in silence, taking this in. It was impossible for her to feel more awful than she did already, but her mind was doing its level best to achieve that. "Dewdrop..." she finally said, simply. "It's good that I inspired you, but you can't live your life trying to be somepony you're not. No pony is perfect." She paused. "Apart from Princess Celestia. But I'm certainly not. I'm insecure, I do stupid things, and I find confrontation hard."

Dewdrop looked as if she was about to deny all this, but Twilight continued. "It was me, Dewdrop. I set a trap and made you fall into that hole because it was easier than just confronting you about how uncomfortable you were making me. It was stupid and cowardly of me. You shouldn't be looking up to me, you're a braver and better pony by far, you just need to be yourself."

Dewdrop shrunk into the bed, pulling the covers up as she looked at Twilight wide-eyed in shock, her faith shattered at the revelation. "B-but... you're Twilight Sparkle!" she whispered.

Twilight hung her head. "Yeah" she said bitterly. "I'm Twilight Sparkle. Just another silly pony. And I let things spiral out of control because I couldn't pluck up the courage just to talk to you. I think I know what my next report to the Princess will be about." She looked over at Dewdrop, who hadn't moved. "And you, Dewdrop?"

Dewdrop nodded in a disheartened manner, her eyes cast down. "Yeah Twilight" she replied sadly. "I've learnt a lesson too."

Twilight gave Dewdrop a friendly if awkward punch on the shoulder. "Look Dewdrop, I'm really sorry about everything that's happened. If you want to go, I'd understand, but I'd like to get to know the real you too."

Dewdrop simply nodded, and turned over to go to sleep.

The next day, Dewdrop was gone. All that remained to show that she had even existed was a scruffy, much loved cuddly toy shaped like Twilight Sparkle, tucked up neatly in bed.


The storm raged over Hoofington, but to the Great and Powerful Trixie who was safe at home practising her magic tricks, the rumble of the thunder sounded like the applause of a grateful crowd.

"Yes, yes, I am rather wonderful!" she purred into the mirror, as she levitated a spoon. The thunder tapped in appreciation.

Only it wasn't the thunder. Trixie turned in annoyance as the tapping turned into banging, coming from her front door. She threw her mane in disgust. "The Great and Powerful Trixie does not appreciate being disturbed in the middle of her rehearsals!" she announced loudly, even though the room was empty. Angrily, she threw open the door.

A streak of lightning arced through the sky, illuminating the form of a blue and pink unicorn, caked in mud and utterly drenched. She was clutching a battered yellow suitcase.

"Hello!" chirped Dewdrop Dazzle, already pushing her suitcase past a confused Trixie and into the house. "I'm Dewdrop Dazzle. Can I come in?"
Last part! I hope you guys all enjoyed it, any and all feedback is welcome, nay encouraged! I was going to hold off on posting the last part, but I didn't want to leave people hanging too much.

Also bonus points for spotting the Doctor Who and Father Ted references!

Part 1: [link]

Part 2: [link]

Part 3: [link]

Part 4: [link]
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Donuts-and-Coffee Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2016  New Deviant Hobbyist Digital Artist
I don't know if feel bad for Twilight


Feel pity for Trixie,because,mother of celestia,she's going to have to deal with it the rest of her life...

Or,she can simply close the door,because c'mon she's trixie and she is supposed to be mean:icontrixiecrunchysiplz 
Shawntheimmortal94 Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
This story was awesome,I saw it on fanfic recon and I loved it,I laughed and got creeped out in the same time,great job
Furox-art Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Student General Artist
Muahahahahahaha! The Great and Powerful Trixie will be reduced to dust!

By the way I love this!
Cristatella Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
lillyabbey22 Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Mwahahahaah! I want to see what she does to Trixie!
melissaduck Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Just finished reading this... Jesus Christ, that was scary. I... I need to go read something more lighthearted before I can get any sleep tonight. Peace out.
Beau-Skunk Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2012
I don't read fanfics often, but I enjoyed this one. It's a nice mix of comedy, parody, (in terms of how Dewdrop's toy is a Twilight recolor) and even some sadness, and drama. There were times I chuckled, and by the end of chapter 3 I even felt quite sad/guilt to when Twilight did.

The title for Chapter 3 kinda made me afraid this was ganna be another "Cupcakes"-wannabe fanfic, but I'm glad you didn't go in that direction, and you did a good job showing Twilight just wanted to scare her a bit, not actually hurt her, wich seems more in-character for her. That is if she were pushed that far by someone that (unintentionally) annoying to her. lol I also loved the hospital scene.

I really like your characterization of Dewdrop as a very overly-friendly pony, yet also you kinda can't really blame Twilight for going kinda paranoid & very annoyed with. There are times when you almost want Twilight to "get even," but then her li'l prank almost seemed to dark for her, but luckly you made it clear she didn't want to go to far with it, and even had guilt.
Then when things don't go as Twilight planned, and tredgedy strikes suddenly I felt put in Twilight's horseshoes. I felt there with Twilight hoping Dewdrop would turn out alright to. I felt real sad when I started to fear Twilight was to late with saving her. That really made the twist in the final chapter more unexpected for me, and more satisfying. (Normally, I can spot a "fake-out" death a mile away, but you disguised it very cleverly.)
I also kinda like the li'l added comic relief at the end, considering things were getting quite dark. (I imagine regardless if Dewdrop learned her lesson, or not, she would probably unintentionally annoy Trixie to. Hehe)
You do a good job balancing the light-heartedness, and comedy, with the darker/serious moments, as well.
Blueshift2k5 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2012
How on earth did I miss this comment! Thanks for the feedback!

A lot of that was very deliberate on my side. I like the idea that the reader takes the side of Twilight (some of the comments on parts 1 and 2 were even asking Twilight to take some drastic measures!) and then turn it on its head by giving the reader what they /think/ they want, ie Twilight going a bit too far and those same people became pretty mortified. The reader becomes an accomplice to the actions because in a way, they spurred things on.

I was a bit worried the end was too 'fake out' but glad you don't think so!
Beau-Skunk Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2012
You're welcome, and I was actually quite relieved when it turned out Dewdrop was alright.
The thing about her going from "annoyance," to "sympathetic" was a pretty clever writing twist you pulled on the readers, I loved that. :) (I also liked her brief backstory.)
Plus, you can't really hate her, she was trying to be nice, and help Twilight, but her naive nature didn't make her realize she was making things worse, and was annoying, and driving Twilight up the wall. Plus as Twilight said, if she just confronted her none of that would've happened, so Twilight was also at fault in that situation, and let her anger build up to much.

I suppose I would've liked more reconciliation between Twilight, and Dewdrop at the end, (though, I guess that's why you left the ending more open) but I still liked the bittersweet ending between them.
It kinda leaves it up to the reader to decide if they still kept in touch, and became friends, or if Dewdrop left suddenly without a word, and Twilight lost a potential friend because of what happened.
SilverStarlite Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
i just finished this, and i must say im impressed. what i liked was how it played out like an actual episode would have, and i would honestly believe this to be a real episode even. however, the ending with trixie was cute, but seemed to ruin the mood for me.
niklashg Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2011
i would have liked it more if Dewdrop Dazzle had lerned somthing insted of just doing the same thing with another pony.
Anon371 Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2011
I would have buried the corpse and walked away. Why not?
Roxor128 Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I think Dewdrop surviving breaks the suspension of disbelief. After the end of Part 3, I thought "Oh, I bet Twilight is in for one hell of a guilt trip now." Come Dewdrop surviving in Part 4, I'm going "Oh, come on! You really expect us to buy that?"

So, my verdict is "mostly good, but let down by the ending".
Blueshift2k5 Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2011
Hi, thanks for the feedback!

Re: Dewdrop not dying, I think that would have taken the story into a place I didn't want it to go. Twilight needed to confront Dewdrop at the end to allow the story to finish with a sense of catharsis. Twilight needed a chance to recover from her mistake and redeem herself, otherwise the story is just depressing for the sake of being depressing.
Zerus63 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow... I'm awe struck at this. Read from 1-4 and it was a very in depth read I must say. Very unique among the other fan-fics I have read, so I congratulate you on a story well done sir.

Aside: Twilight's my favorite and seeing this dark persona of her has frightened me... hope she doesn't go homicidal on me if should I ever discover Equestria my self :D
saeth-kaleanae Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2011
Its well written, technically speaking. Dewdrop is just a tad to bit scary stalker. And Twilight... It works, up until she finds Dewdrop in the hole. She told her she didn't like storms. She's obviously terrified. I just can not see Twilight leaving her there.
Blueshift2k5 Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2011
Thanks for that comment!

I see it as a story about the exception proving the rule. No, Twilight isn't like that, but we've all had times when we've gone way too far and hurt someone; at the time it all makes sense but in hindsight it's awful. A bit like how Spike tries to frame Owlowiscious for murder in 'Owl's Well That Ends Well'. I mean, that's crazy but it made sense to him at the time.
RexIvan Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2011
The greatest of teachers won't hesitate to leave you there by yourself chained to your fate.

I can't help but be reminded of that line while reading about Dewdrop having her hero-complex shattered by the cruelty of the world. Too bad she only listened to half the lesson.

It's a shame that some times situations come to this sort of thing in real life, due to the same types of fears (keeping things that bother you bottled up, out of courtesy, till you lash out unreasonably at the littlest slight). Personally, I didn't really find Dewdrop that irritating from the very start, just fairly creepy ... and I sort of thought it was going to turn into "single white female", which would have also been entertaining (but you wanted to keep it with the spirit of the story, which I think you did very nicely). Bravo.
BlackWidower Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2011  Professional Writer
...and the ending makes it.

I must ask, can one assume Twilight just glossed over the attempted ponyslaughter in her report to Princess Celestia?
Salnax Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2011
Dear Princess Celestia,

Friendship can be hard to understand sometimes. People will want to become friends, but will make mistakes, and end up hurting others. However, if we don't learn how to respond to that friendship, we can make terrible mistakes. If both sides aren't careful, that friendship can be lost forever.

Your Faithful Student
Twilight Sparkle
br2nd66 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2011
round two here we go
SweeneyAlbrighte Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2011
this needs to become an actual episode, granted it may be a little to mature for them to actually make, but I still want to see this a play out on screen. I loved it top to bottom, keep being awesome!
frostedpuffs Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2011  Student Digital Artist
LOL, love the ending! Amazing story!
AnkokuFang Featured By Owner May 26, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
EPIC ending. a great fanfic to read as my first MLP fanfic read
HunterGhor Featured By Owner May 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Wow; what can I really say about this story that hasn't been said already? XD But, lol, in seriousness, I really, really enjoyed it. It, quite fortuitously, happened to be the first MLP fanfic I ever read, and I cannot think of a better one to have picked for it. The story is the perfect combination of touching and comedic, and your decision to take a an obscure/toy-only character and give them a genuine personality struck me as ingenious (it also happens to be a technique I love using myself, though, so I may be a tad biased. xP). I'll echo what some folks said about the ending being a tad (unintentionally?) bittersweet, but it definitely fit the tone of the series all the same.

I have to say, I actually also found your work quite inspiring; I've actually been wanting to try my hand at MLP fanfic myself at some point, but being someone who's only recently gotten into the series and hasn't seen every episode, I have to restrain myself, lest I end up creating a horribly OOC abomination. XD I also admit that I felt almost tempted to make some kind of epilogue drabble that happifies the ending a bit, but obviously that would be rather imprudent for someone who has only just now began to communicate with you, plus, having read the comments, I realise it would be a rather grave breach of the author's original intent. >>; BUT...never mind my irrelevant rambling; good work all around, and I shall be sure to keep an eye on your future works~
Blueshift2k5 Featured By Owner May 15, 2011
Thanks, that's pretty humbling to read :) I'm really glad you enjoyed it!

I don't mind at all if you want to write something related to the tale. As far as I'm concerned, it ended where it ended, and that end was one of the main things I had in mind; but the idea of authorial intent is one that the literary world has been struggling with for decades, and it isn't going to be solved in My Little Pony fanfic! :) Heck, I've written an alternate 'Cupcakes' fic, along with many other people!
HunterGhor Featured By Owner May 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome! ^^ It was just as much of a pleasure to write; you deserved every word of praise. Plus I'm always happy to drop a detailed comment of that sort on works that truly deserve it.

Really? Well, thank you! I'm happy to hear as much; I thought at first that I might have gone too far in suggesting such a thing, thinking that it would give the impression that I was unsatisfied with the story as is. >> Certainly not the case; I just find the idea of closure for Twilight after what happened appealing. And yes, you have quite a valid point there; authorial intent is simply one of those issues so big that trying to deal with it would inhibit one from having fun with writing. ^^ And...LOL, wow, really? Not surprising; I can plainly see why ANYONE would want to re-do that particular abomination. XD Well, okay, not me yet, obviously, but that's merely because I just found out what Cupcakes was the other day...and promptly tried to forget!

Anyhow, whatever I end up making, if anything (my muse can be notoriously fickle...), I suppose I'll probably note you with it or something; I'd rather not my very first posted story on DA be something so derivative. ^^;
Solaris90 Featured By Owner May 9, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Are Twilight's thoughts about evil near the beginning the Doctor Who reference?
Blueshift2k5 Featured By Owner May 9, 2011
Not deliberately, but my mind is so soaked in Dr Who it might be accidently! I'm sure I put in some deliberate Who references in it though, I usually do! :)
SwordSparks Featured By Owner May 1, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Okay, Trixie is going to lose her mind now.
Nazgul100 Featured By Owner May 1, 2011
I think the worst part is that Dewdrop didnt learn anything from all that. Its almost like she just deleted everything from her memory concerning Twillight.
Blueshift2k5 Featured By Owner May 1, 2011
Well, she did learn /a/ lesson, it was just the wrong lesson. ('Don't try to copy Twilight', rather than 'don't try to copy anyone else, just be yourself')

Don't worry, Trixie will set her straight I'm sure! ;)
Emerald-Glaceon Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2011  Student Digital Artist
o dear lord. when i was reading this it was ironicly storming. so i went outside the watch the lightning when something came out of the shadows and i screamed and ran in thinking it was a human dewdrop dazzle. this story is amazing nice job
KriegsaffeNo9 Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2011
Going from "oh crap" to "aww" to "awww..." to "oh God this will not end well" is a helluva trick for an ending. J'approve!
LadyFoxling Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
LOL THAT WAS AMAZING!!! I love the ending xD Trixie would be so angry!
HolyDemonAndy Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2011
Oh my gosh I didn't expect this. This story was absolutely fantastic. I hope you share the next story you do with Equestria Daily because if it's as good as this one is then I'm totally reading it.
ShineeMew Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
DamHam Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2011
Awesome story. Though i guess because we are infected with rainbows and ponies we cant make grimdark endings anymore.

This was as good as it could ever get with some copypony that can only mimic others and not be herself.
Blueshift2k5 Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2011

Personally, I'm of the belief that if you are trying to write something in the style of the show, it shouldn't go too far past the boundaries of the show, hence this story is only really as 'grimdark' as Celestia's bird exploding in flames in that one ep.
DamHam Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2011
yea you are most likely correct. I liked the writing style / format too. It made it easy to read.

I also liked that the the start and the ending remain very true to each others. There is also very little fluff and you do do much with few words.
Don-ko Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Cool story bro!
I made my "Drawfriend" entry (for the event on ED) based on your story!
Blueshift2k5 Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2011
Oh good grief, that is amazing! :) :)

I have no words! :) Thanks!
Paprika1 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2011
a dark ending for a light harted show would have been prefrle but that's me
loveiswoe Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011
i think i get it: dewdrop is helping ponies relize that their just everyday ponies, that they all have their own little flaws, and once she helps some one SEE those flaws shes off to help some other pony.
Drwhoof Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011
Great story bro. The ending managed to steer clear of stereotypes while remaining quite heartfelt.
DrNazus Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011
I love the ending! :love:
NoImNotThatGuy Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011   Photographer
I'm relieved she lived, but I admit, I was hoping for a happy ending with her and Twilight reconciling and becoming best friends, but you can't have everything, I suppose.

But, I love the way you structured this story. Well done. It makes me want to read some other works of yours.
Blueshift2k5 Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011
I think a properly 'happy' ending would have been a bit twee and unrealistic, even for magical talking ponies. But it was happy, in a way. :)

Glad you liked it! I seem to have got the fiction bug back!
thelovelypenguin Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2011
Dewdrop doesn't learn, does she? Kinda sad that nearly dying doesn't even give her an epiphany. We love her anyway. I think.

Hehe, Trixie's in for way more love and adoration than she'll know what to do with!
PecanO-O Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2011
To be honest, when I picture Dewdrop's personality, I start to see the Copycat girl from the older Pokemon games. The one in Saffron City? Yeah.
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